Friday, May 30, 2014

Michael's Biography

   Michael was born on April 18 in Brooklyn,New York Michael likes to play basketball. He was playing basketball ever since he was a little boy. He wanted to know how to fly a kite but he liked basketball so much that he forgot about flying a kite and lost his interest. At the age of 13 his teacher (Mrs. Grate) asked him if he's interested in flying a kite. He did not know that it was hard to build a kite so he said he will take the chance of building it and open his mind to new things.
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  1. UnknownJune 18, 2014 at 5:22 AM

    In the first sentence your talking about where he was born then about how he likes basketball. You should put a period in the middle of New York and Michael since that doesnt make sense if your going from one topic to another.

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    1. AnonymousJune 18, 2014 at 10:52 AM

      So you are suggesting that he uses more transitional phrases or that he fills in the gap of time between? Great feedback! I totally agree!

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  2. UnknownJune 18, 2014 at 5:31 AM

    Great biography very explanatory, but why did you choose to take that chance to attempt to build a kite.

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